Dude. Awesomeness! I fully appreciate your perception on this. If I had to really critique it, I would say in ur detuning you should either lower the "mid" tone eq wise, or, only do a few semi tones in the mids. Also in your chord structure, if you detune the high note and semi detune the middle and low note it would produce a awesome eerie stab bc of the frequency clash. the last part is just a crazy theory but maybe it would work?idk honstly. Looks good on paper...lol Awesome Job Dude!